my beyond the still canon contest entry

[mikekobal]

hi guys,
please check it out and let me know what you think - hope you like it
my first attempt in being a bit mysterious and more narrative..
all comments welcome
http://www.mikekobal.com/blog/?p=483
cheers,
mike

[mikekobal]

exciting news: my entry made the finals:)
http://vimeo.com/groups/beyondthestill
check out the other videos as well
cheers,
mike

[Colorwave]

Beautifully conceived and executed, Mike.  A pleasure to watch.  Congratulations.

[mikekobal]

thanks much Ron.

[fredjeang]

Great Mike.

Just something post-prod as a spectator:
Well, from the begining to where the metro start, there are some shots alternating different lights that, according to me, did not worked that well,
-second 35 is suddenly too bright.
-different light temp from the street and the inside is too much visible in that sense that I could notice it, and I should not.
then, lots of colors stimulations to the green that are useless.
-minute 01:13 is too dark, if he is first in the stairs and in the dark, and suddenly the stairs are iluminated like the Eiffel tower but it is the same
action.
From there to the end it is perfect.
For example, the cut 01:14 - 01:16 is simply perfect!

A little more care in these details and you are soon in Cannes.  

Cheers,

Fred.

[mikekobal]

thanks for your input Fred, yeah, i am aware that the movie is far from perfect, and i am still very far from Cannes  but it was fun to do and i learned a lot, will try to be better nxt time

[BardAzima]

This is pretty impressive.  I appreciate fredjeang's commentary and attention to detail but I was actually less focused on the details (which are important of course) and more interested in how good it looks aesthetically.  Question, how did you find working with the manual focus?  What was your process?  Beyond that, great job - and all the best with your future film-making endeavours.